A successful person
A successful person should play his or her role very well. For example, be a student, his or her job is to do homeworks and study hard. In my opinions, a successful person is not equal to a celebrity. However, everyone could be a successful person. Everyone should have an ambition when his or her was young. Everyone must have a basic of knowledge and toward the goal to become a professional. A successful person neither make a mount of money nor be a tycoon. It is vital for him or her to enjoy at jobs even if he or she is a litte office worker. when he or she fail, a successful person will learn lesson and grow wiser after the event. A successful person could read newspapers or books to creat new aspect; he or she would learn and try a new thing which is never done. Finally, a successful person must be healthy.
posted by teracy1296 at 5:28 AM
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A successful person should play his or her charater very well.
character-->role
For example, be a father or mother, his or her job is to take care of chrildren and do the best.
-->(be a father or mother) sounds awkward, can you change a way to write it?
-->children
However, everyone could be a successful person. Everyone should have a ambition when his or her was young.
->an ambition
Everyone must have a basic of knowledge and toward the goal to become a professional.
-->a basic of knowledge? (general knoweldge?)
A successful person neither make a mount of money nor be a tycoon.
--> makes a lot of moeny = a tycoon?
Can you revise this sentence?
It is vital for him or her to enjoyment at jobs even if he or she be a litte office worker.
-->to enjoy his/her work ...is ...
when he or she fail, a successful person will learn lesson which is be wise after the event.
-->When.. and grow wiser after the event.
A successful person could read newspapers or books to creat new sentiment;
-->sentiment?
he or she would learn and try a new thing which is never do.
-->is never done
Finally, a successful person must be healthy.
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